From the shoes I wore in the Writers Guild.
(We breathe life into our stories by showing instead of telling. Paint a picture with your words that transports the reader. – Laura Bailey)
An exercise in Characterization.
The old man walked to the park in the early afternoon. He’d walked there over the years, holding the tiny hand of his little girl who skipped along beside him. When she had grown, he walked alone carrying a book or the evening paper until once again he would walk the familiar route holding the tiny hand of his granddaughter.
Not much had changed in the park over the last fifty years. The ducks still haggle over bread crumbs and the elms still spread their restful shade over his favorite bench. He alone had changed.
His wavy black hair had faded like autumn leaves into downy white patches. The sky blue eyes that sparkled with boyish charm had clouded and dimmed. The handsome young man who sat upon the shaded bench now sat there like a broken doll left behind by some little girl who had run away to play.
With the gentle music of children’s laughter, his mind returned to the days of little girls running in the sun. He smiled to himself, oblivious to his striped pajamas and slippered feet.
The young woman who had come to stand beside him, for a moment, also seemed to drift into some distant memory. “I thought I’d find you here, grandpa.” She said. “You shouldn’t wander off like that.”
A spark of recognition seemed to flash across his face, then calling her by her mother’s name, he took her hand.
Characterization is the process by which the writer reveals the personality of a character.
Types
An acronym, PAIRS, can help you recall the five methods of characterization: physical description, action, inner thoughts, reactions, and speech.
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Character are important selfidentity by which we feel ourself.
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Omgoodness! Thank you so much for thinking of me for this award! I am completely humbled! 💕
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A limping child, an older dog, and three tame ducks made their way along the rocky shore, looking for a missing shoe. Words that paint pictures and speak to the soul…thanks for a great post and excellent guidance! Hope God stops by your place for a chat and refreshments today :).
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Rita, I don’t know how you managed in such few lines to both exemplify PAIRS, encourage AND bless my day. Thank you so much💕
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Incredible! Such a moving, lovely beginning of a story!
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Thank you so much, Kelly Ann!💕
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You’re so welcome Laura! 🙂
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Beautiful story! Thanks for sharing and for the helpful tip!
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Thank you so much!
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Thanks to Mitch Teemley for introducing me to you and thanks to YOU for this wonderful reminder. I need all the help I can get!
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Thank you so much!
Very nice to meet you and I look forward to reading more of your blog!
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Commendable story.what a good start maam .thnks
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This is a beautiful way to teach. And PAIRS, thank for that! – a struggling writer
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Awww…thank you so much💕
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As an English/speech teacher I always told my students, “Don’t tell me, SHOW me.” You did such a wonderful job here. What a beautiful picture of a sweet man. ❤
(I got teary-eyed reading this. I do hope the virus is gone soon, so we can start holding our grandchildren's hands again.)
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Thank you so much, Ann! You made my day with your lovely comment! I do hope for normalcy again as well. We are missing the time we normal get with our 7 grandchildren as well.
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Reblogged this on Mitch Teemley and commented:
My Featured Blogger this week is Laura M. Bailey of All the Shoes I Wear. Laura is a writer whose insights come from a colorful, wildly varied life. Her writing is informed, she explains, by “all the shoes I’ve worn…from beach baby to city girl, wife, mother…construction worker, grease monkey, tattoo studio owner, race horse breeder, poet…” But most of all, she says, it comes from being “a flawed human profoundly in love with God.” Those “shoes” show in this warm character piece and, indeed, in all the posts she writes. Enjoy!
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Thank you for reblogging this. I may not have got to read it otherwise.
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Omgoodness Mitch! I am beyond honored and completely humbled that you would share my post and the warmth and kindness in which you blessed me with and shared it.
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The honor is mine, Laura. Blessings.
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Such a helpful tip Laura! Hope you are well and that you enjoyed your fourth of July weekend!
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Hi!
Omgosh! Thank you so much! Hope you had a wonderful 4th as well! My husbands birthday is today so 4 of our 5 kids, with their families, were all able to come visit as for 5 days! It’s been hectic, exciting and full of ecstatic playfulness here on the lake.
An added gift, was the revealing that we are to have yet another grandchild who will arrive in February!
I am exhausted, thread bare and could not be happier 😊
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Tender and engaging, Laura. Lovely work.
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Thank you so very much, Mitch💕
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Excellent characterization! I got sidetracked by the image of the grandpa with his grandchild. (That’s my fantasy.) I know it will eventually happen as my son is a good man who the right woman will have the good fortune of marrying.
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Oh, I’d be so excited for you! Being a grandparents is absolutely the very best time in life!💕
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I love the PAIRS acronym!
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Sweet story, Laura.
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Thank you so much, VJ! 💕 So good to see you too!
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Welcome.
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This is sadly beautiful! You have illustrated well your quote above.
Dwight
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Thank you so much, Dwight💕 You made my day!
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You are welcome! My father in law had Alzheimer’s so I understood the back story to this one.
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I seriously had to walk my mother through it after she’d read it, twice! My initial confidence in having adequately created that understanding for the reader, was quickly replaced with self doubt. Lol
It’s a huge relief and comfort to know you complete grasped the picture I was trying to paint here. 🤗
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For any one who has had an experience with Alzheimer’s it is very clear. Thank you for the great story!
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